Scenario 19 (63) Chaos Path
There is a small error at the end of this scenario, after you win the battle.
Liana says: “But, after we end Bernhardt, only the descendants of Light remain. I look forward to them.”
Shouldn’t she say crush/kill/etc. Bernhardt? End sounds somewhat… strange. Also, shouldn’t remain have “will” or “shall” in front of it? It seems like that would make the sentence sound a little neater. In fact, while I’m nitpicking, can’t something be put before “them” as well? Making the final sentence
But, after we crush Bernhardt, only the descendants of Light shall remain. I look forward to facing them.
The last two suggestions are minor, but “end Bernhardt” is just awkward. I used crush instead of defeat because Erwin uses the term defeat a line later.
June 5th, 2007 at 12:31 pm
Fixed.
June 5th, 2007 at 3:59 pm
Wow, people are reporting just about anything now. O_o I thought that sounded perfectly fine as it was.
June 5th, 2007 at 4:11 pm
Yeah I agree. I think people are trying to get everything they can in now that it’s more urgent than ever. If anything, original sounds better to me.
June 5th, 2007 at 4:42 pm
I’m sure D takes the suggestions with a lump of salt. And the original sentence did seem a bit awkward.