Imperial 13 to 15
Only checked the tile in 13, and it was good.
1. In Imperial 13, when Scott dies: “If I’d been a bit stronger, Many would still be alive …” The word “many” doesn’t need a capital “M.”
2. A commander says, “A welcoming committee,” but he’s dying 
3. In the intro to Imperial 14:
Despite their best efforts, the Kalxath forces were nothing to Erwin and his company. They took Salrath with ease.
It’s not Kalxath, it’s Salrath. Suggestion: “Despite their best efforts, Salrath fell with ease to the might of Erwin and his company.”
4. More intro:
However, even with Salrath under the Empire's control, the company could not ignore those who would endanger Imperial troops.
I don’t think they are overly concerned about Imperial troops. I’d say, “could not ignore those who could join forces with Kalxath.” Or “those who could interfere with the Imperial plans.”
5. And at the end of the intro text, Aaron is referenced as “an old swordsman,” but we already know who Aaron is; he should be “the old swordsman.” During the scenario, at least Hein and Erwin recognise him even.
6. A villager asks: “Sir Aaron, what shall we do?” And Erwin replies, but it sounds funny:
This isn't your battle. We'll take care of things.
But I can't guarantee your safety here. Leave now, for your own protection!
The villager replies, “O, okay!” And then Aaron is intrigued by Erwin’s nobility of intent. It makes sense, but it feels as if Erwin thinks he’s Aaron. I’d go for something in the vein of: “This battle is not against you. But you should leave immediately before you get hurt.” Or something.
7. Aaron says he’ll show me “what a real army’s about!” I would get rid of the contraction. You probably wouldn’t say it that way, but visually I think it’s better if it’s spelled out. Your call, I guess.
8. During the intro to Imperial 15:
However, the objectives behind Alhazard remain shrouded in a fog of mystery.
“The objectives behind Alhazard?” I’d say “the Emperor Bernhardt’s objectives,” or “the objectives behind Alhazard’s revival,” perhaps.
9. Should Egbert’s “If I close on Liana” be “If I close in on Liana?”
10. A commander, dying: “O, out of the way!” He was a flying commander, but still …
11. And finally, Jessica notes: “Egbert is pressing forward … / What!? What if …?” That “what!?” is simply unbecoming of her. Consider: “Aah!”
By the way, how exactly can you capture Liana? I’d really like to try that.
May 28th, 2007 at 4:53 am
5. No you don’t. Aaron has never appeared in the game yet. This is his first appearance on Imperial path.
11. Get Egbert next to her before someone kills her.
May 28th, 2007 at 9:48 am
Hmmm… Isn’t Aaron supposed to appear in Scenario 10 of the Imperial path, before the battle for the Langrisser?… I think that’s what Alejandro Moreno meant when he said that the company already knows Aaron…
May 28th, 2007 at 10:24 am
Oh. Didn’t know.
May 28th, 2007 at 5:52 pm
at the end of scenario 15, liana said to erwin “well, you ‘re doing a terrible job!” sounds weird. is it wrong?
May 28th, 2007 at 5:56 pm
It does catch you off guard, but I think it’s correct. Erwin’s main purpose is peace, so he is doing quite a terrible job of it, bringing war to every non-Imperial territory.
May 28th, 2007 at 5:59 pm
Sorry.
Forgot to mention: the slight double-take one does when reading that line? I think it’s actually a good thing.
May 28th, 2007 at 11:38 pm
That line is rather a verbal bitchslap.